Chapter 34
Aden signed --> Aden sighed
Chapter 37
red yes looked --> red eyes looked
focussed n the --> focussed on the
Typos and Errors
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These should be up to date. I also fixed two cases of the word "bursted"... ^_^;
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Chapter 37
Jove wished he could get rid of the tears in Tan’s eyes. He made a conscious effort not to boost Tan’s magi though.
Tan's magiC?
Tan started to say something but cut him off, “Just maintain the spell.”
but JOVE cut him off.
Chapter 38
Didn't see any.
Jove wished he could get rid of the tears in Tan’s eyes. He made a conscious effort not to boost Tan’s magi though.
Tan's magiC?
Tan started to say something but cut him off, “Just maintain the spell.”
but JOVE cut him off.
Chapter 38
Didn't see any.
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Chapter 39
More involved simple uses include gravity and metals.
Not really a typo, but the wording is awkward. "More involved" typically means the exact opposite of "simple."
Chapter 40
Didn't see any.
Chapter 41
That evening Jove and his friends were sitting around one of the cafeteria tables. The dinner of the evening was a tofu stir fry
You've used "evening" twice in two sentences. I'd reword the second to "That night's dinner was..."
More involved simple uses include gravity and metals.
Not really a typo, but the wording is awkward. "More involved" typically means the exact opposite of "simple."
Chapter 40
Didn't see any.
Chapter 41
That evening Jove and his friends were sitting around one of the cafeteria tables. The dinner of the evening was a tofu stir fry
You've used "evening" twice in two sentences. I'd reword the second to "That night's dinner was..."
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Chapter 42
Her whole body grew, even hunched over as it was, Elsa was taller then before her change.
Taller thAn before her change.
Her whole body grew, even hunched over as it was, Elsa was taller then before her change.
Taller thAn before her change.
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Chapter 43
No typos
Chapter 44
The elephants head was much more animalistic, with enlarged ears and a nose that hung down past his chin.
The elephant's head
While it was placing the on his face, he started simple arcane gestures with his second set of arms.
It was placing theM on his face.
Punctuation in both of these next ones:
Please forgive me Miss Elsa but I need to do this divination before we go.
Please forgive me, Miss Elsa, but... OR Please forgive me Miss Elsa, but...
Come along. Lets go see Magus Walton. You too Julius.
Come along. Let's go see Magus Walton. You too, Julius.
Also, the name changes from Edward to Edwards frequently, which is confusing.
No typos
Chapter 44
The elephants head was much more animalistic, with enlarged ears and a nose that hung down past his chin.
The elephant's head
While it was placing the on his face, he started simple arcane gestures with his second set of arms.
It was placing theM on his face.
Punctuation in both of these next ones:
Please forgive me Miss Elsa but I need to do this divination before we go.
Please forgive me, Miss Elsa, but... OR Please forgive me Miss Elsa, but...
Come along. Lets go see Magus Walton. You too Julius.
Come along. Let's go see Magus Walton. You too, Julius.
Also, the name changes from Edward to Edwards frequently, which is confusing.
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Ack! I thought I fixed that name issue. It's Edward.
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Archanist Erickson now conforms to the single-spelling name elitism.