Typos and Errors

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Benabik » Mon Jul 04, 2011 1:41 am

Chapter 34

Aden signed --> Aden sighed

Chapter 37

red yes looked --> red eyes looked

focussed n the --> focussed on the

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Joshua » Tue Jul 05, 2011 10:32 pm

These should be up to date. I also fixed two cases of the word "bursted"... ^_^;

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Eseme » Thu Jul 14, 2011 10:36 pm

Chapter 37

Jove wished he could get rid of the tears in Tan’s eyes. He made a conscious effort not to boost Tan’s magi though.

Tan's magiC?

Tan started to say something but cut him off, “Just maintain the spell.”

but JOVE cut him off.

Chapter 38

Didn't see any.

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Eseme » Mon Aug 08, 2011 12:55 pm

Chapter 39

More involved simple uses include gravity and metals.

Not really a typo, but the wording is awkward. "More involved" typically means the exact opposite of "simple."


Chapter 40

Didn't see any.


Chapter 41

That evening Jove and his friends were sitting around one of the cafeteria tables. The dinner of the evening was a tofu stir fry

You've used "evening" twice in two sentences. I'd reword the second to "That night's dinner was..."

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Eseme » Mon Aug 08, 2011 9:10 pm

Chapter 42

Her whole body grew, even hunched over as it was, Elsa was taller then before her change.

Taller thAn before her change.

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Eseme » Tue Aug 23, 2011 10:22 pm

Chapter 43

No typos


Chapter 44

The elephants head was much more animalistic, with enlarged ears and a nose that hung down past his chin.

The elephant's head


While it was placing the on his face, he started simple arcane gestures with his second set of arms.

It was placing theM on his face.


Punctuation in both of these next ones:

Please forgive me Miss Elsa but I need to do this divination before we go.

Please forgive me, Miss Elsa, but... OR Please forgive me Miss Elsa, but...


Come along. Lets go see Magus Walton. You too Julius.

Come along. Let's go see Magus Walton. You too, Julius.


Also, the name changes from Edward to Edwards frequently, which is confusing.

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Joshua » Wed Aug 24, 2011 12:56 pm

Ack! I thought I fixed that name issue. It's Edward.

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Re: Typos and Errors

Postby Joshua » Wed Sep 14, 2011 8:15 am

Archanist Erickson now conforms to the single-spelling name elitism.


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