Silver Insanity

Bah ha ha, love triangles! Everyone seems big on those. I'm liking the different reactions in the Abyss in Chapter 33. That's cool, and realistic. Not surprised that Rai turned up. He does that. Also, Jove getting more protectors is hilarious. And then the plot thickens! We've got a reasonably smart...

Chapter 31: He opened Aether to the listing of magic uses from yesterday. I would change the tense, to "He opened Aether to the listing of magic uses from the previous day." Aeon 1: James tore the feeder sheets from the printer. “The program screws up one out of ever six accounts. One out...

Chapter 30: Someone else nearly killing Jove. This seems to happen a lot. I like this "Jove manipulates magic like it is an element" theory better than the "Jove is a Revoker" theory. Chapter 31: Tan geeking about Merlin was amusing. Not really sure what Jove was doing at the be...

Ah ha, someone found out about Aether! By the way "Ten more bones to go!" is CREEPY. Ick. Porr Mark! Now he's got a reputation as a jerk. And everyone thinks Jove is a Revoker. Man, rumors suck. One thing to watch out for here - one person in the school was possessed by a Vorax. And he put...

Chapter 25 Gaming! Sweet. I made some suggestions on the typo thread for how to make this a bit clearer to non-gamers. Still, I really like the gaming club atmosphere, and the hobs. How handy to know which game you'll like! Chapter 26: I like getting more history, and learning that levels can mean ...

Bah ha ha, Duane rocks! Just saying. Chapter 25: Jove coughed and changed the subject, “So, what kind of games do mages play?” You may want to change that to "What kind of role-playing games do mages play?" to make it clearer to non-gamers what you are talking about. Also, you may want to ...

Chapter 23: Dwaine is spelled Dwaine and Duane. Which is it? “This is amazing.” Dwaine walked in without hesitation, stepping onto a few stairs that lead down to a large landing were most of the rest of class were already. The past tense of "to lead" is led. “Gestures is the art of using y...

I've been reading for a bit - messages and reactions went to you privately. Chapter 23! OK, Dwaine makes me laugh. If you ever need light humor, he's your crow. Love him. Again, I like getting to know the various students. Different personalities are interesting, and different magics. Mark is still ...

I'd agree with Benabik.

Chapter 18 is a good history. I think the students' reactions make it a good read. It's also a compelling history that makes sense. As for No Magic, I think it's there to give more examples of the student's personalities. Mark stands out, of course. And Julius. Knowing who the bullies are is good. F...